When trouble slumbers I lie awake In the teasing patterns of a dreamlike mist And I search for the start of my fatal mistake
WIth red-rimmed eyes I yearn to break The imposing walls of the moonlight-kissed When trouble slumbers I lie awake
My bones clench and instinctively shake My shoulders hunch as my thoughts slowly twist And I search for the start of my fatal mistake
I cry a river through a frozen lake Fingernails bite in a white-knuckled fist When trouble slumbers I lie awake
Trying to live through an eternal ache With dizzying doubts of a snow-pale wrist And I search for the start of my fatal mistake
I spread my wings for my own sake And dance with the pulse of the love I have missed When trouble slumbers I lie awake And I search for the start of my fatal mistake
Man. It's so eloquent, and the images are gorgeous, and then you have to fit it into a structure. This would be amazing if it were free verse rather than a villanelle.
If I may lengthen my post and quote my cousin:
Haiku I have always thought Specific poetic forms Suck ass
If I may lengthen my post and quote my cousin:
Haiku
I have always thought
Specific poetic forms
Suck ass