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When trouble slumbers I lie awake
In the teasing patterns of a dreamlike mist
And I search for the start of my fatal mistake

WIth red-rimmed eyes I yearn to break
The imposing walls of the moonlight-kissed
When trouble slumbers I lie awake

My bones clench and instinctively shake
My shoulders hunch as my thoughts slowly twist
And I search for the start of my fatal mistake

I cry a river through a frozen lake
Fingernails bite in a white-knuckled fist
When trouble slumbers I lie awake

Trying to live through an eternal ache
With dizzying doubts of a snow-pale wrist
And I search for the start of my fatal mistake

I spread my wings for my own sake
And dance with the pulse of the love I have missed
When trouble slumbers I lie awake
And I search for the start of my fatal mistake
Critique is always appreciated.
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Man. It's so eloquent, and the images are gorgeous, and then you have to fit it into a structure. This would be amazing if it were free verse rather than a villanelle.

If I may lengthen my post and quote my cousin:

Haiku
I have always thought
Specific poetic forms
Suck ass
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