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Every face is faked
Every laugh is learned
Every smile hides a sob
Every tear takes its toll
Every answer is an ache
Every wince was once a war
Every stumble leaves a scar
Every mark has a message
Every laugh is learned
Every smile hides a sob
Every tear takes its toll
Every answer is an ache
Every wince was once a war
Every stumble leaves a scar
Every mark has a message
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This has a very nice flow to it... no doubt because you're doing a "face-faked; laugh-learned..." you know, first letters are the same, so it rolls off your tongue easily. I like it; but also agree with the below... I think there's more lines needed... the last kind of feels like a halfway thing...
Idea: why not take it and turn it into prose? After each line, write a little part of the story... ? An idea that I've worked with occasionally. It's fun.
Idea: why not take it and turn it into prose? After each line, write a little part of the story... ? An idea that I've worked with occasionally. It's fun.