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Every face is faked

Every laugh is learned

Every smile hides a sob

Every tear takes its toll

Every answer is an ache

Every wince was once a war

Every stumble leaves a scar

Every mark has a message
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masvida's avatar
This has a very nice flow to it... no doubt because you're doing a "face-faked; laugh-learned..." you know, first letters are the same, so it rolls off your tongue easily. I like it; but also agree with the below... I think there's more lines needed... the last kind of feels like a halfway thing...

Idea: why not take it and turn it into prose? After each line, write a little part of the story... ? An idea that I've worked with occasionally. It's fun.